Limpet Wars - Limpets Information » lot http://limpetwars.com Did you know that limpets are secretly at war? Mon, 21 May 2012 18:21:57 +0000 en hourly 1 http://wordpress.org/?v=3.3.1 Is this well written in English? http://limpetwars.com/limpets/is-this-well-written-in-english/ http://limpetwars.com/limpets/is-this-well-written-in-english/#comments Wed, 13 Jul 2011 12:52:33 +0000 admin http://limpetwars.com/limpets/is-this-well-written-in-english Continue reading →]]> I am an Spanish amateur film maker. I upload my videos to YouTube and I was thinking about increase the number of viewers by making videos in English, but the problem is that I might make a lot of mistakes with the language.

Could you please read the text and tell me what changes should I make? For example, an expression that is used incorrectly, grammar mistakes or anything you notice that doesn’t sound good.
Any help is appreciated, THANK YOU!

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CLAUDIA: Hi, I’m Claudia. You may ask yourself how did I get to where I am… You know, my natural beauty, my acrylic nails, my stardom… well here goes my secret. I do not feel it is a secret, though. You be the judge. It all started when I was born.

PAPI: ¿What’s up, honey? ¿What’s uuuup? (he is recording with his camera)

MAMI: DO NOT ZOOM IN!!! I’M TELLING YOU, DO NOT ZOOM IN!!!

[...]

CLAUDIA: As a child, I didn’t like that much going to kindergarten

CHILD: I-DON’T-WANNA-GO-TO-SCHOOL!!!!

CLAUDIA: I was not like normal girls. I was attracted… to other stuff.

CHILD: Now, you are the queen (she is painting the lips of a hippo)

MAMI: Claudia, that color is too bold for a hippo!

[...]

CLAUDIA: My childhood wasn’t a bed of roses. Sometimes I had to fight against the thorns of the roses myself…

CHILD: Mami, I’m home! Mami! Mami, I want my snack now! Mom?? What are you doing…?

CLAUDIA: That was her fifth husband…

MAMI: Oh, nothing, darlin! (hiding) And now, let me think for a while…

[...]

CLAUDIA: As time passed by, I realized that a rose comes with a thorn, and a lotus grows in a mud slush. When I let the Phoenix inside me rise and arise, I became a bad girl.

CHILD: Wow, look how many friends I got…

CLAUDIA: My hounds followed me till high school … I always mixed with VIP people.

CLAUDIA: Want a cigarette?

CLAUDIA: Since my teens, I was attracted by the fame. That’s why I set up my own band.

CLAUDIA: Hi everyone! We are Claudia’s Limpet and this is our first single!

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